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The Crooked Old Man (1st 10 pgs)


                                                                FADE IN:

            Any small town in Europe.

                                NARRATOR (V.O.)
                      With the ending of the first world war
                      many in Europe were left without
                      protection or identity.  Violating the
                      Versailles Treaty patriots devised a plan
                      of defense called the Mirror Project, a
                      clandestine network of deep cover spies
                      whose mission was to observe societal
                      behavior looking for national threats
                      communicating their intelligence solely
                      through a chain of anonymous letters.
                      Worse than the routine and isolation was
                      not knowing their letters’ ultimate
                      destination.  The fact others knew and
                      they did not would test their resolve,
                      their allegiance and their sanity.

            INT. 503 MARBUFFPLATZ - MAUTHAUSEN, GERMANY - NIGHT

            A drafty, rundown room fortified like a bunker by piles of
            papers listing and leaning against every wall.

            VAAS, middle-aged, moody as a chess master in the body of a
            coal miner, seals an envelope.  Exhausted.

                                VAAS
                      Another letter.  Another night.  In this
                      room.  All alone.

            Neatly puts away his writing materials.  Paces.  Adjusts
            papers on their stacks.  The sight hurts his eyes.  Folds the
            top sheet.  Stands at attention.  Presents the folded sheet.

                                VAAS
                      MY NOTES, HERR GENERAL.  No, Herr general
                      I don’t yet see a pattern.  Yes, Herr
                      general letters still coming.  No, Herr
                      general have not missed a post.

            Vaas looks around the room.  LAUGHS at the amount of paper.

                                VAAS
                      Just look around.

            Vaas flies into a rage scattering piles of papers.  As pages
            drift to the floor so does Vaas.  He begins cleaning up.

                                VAAS
                      Losing my mind.  Have to get out of here.
                      I’ll post this one and I’ll...take a
                      walk, yes!  See people.  See real people.

            EXT. STREET

            Vaas walks down a deserted street.  Looks at the buildings on
            either side of the narrow strip.  Rips at his overcoat to
            breathe.  Bends over.  At his feet is a faded, crumpled   

            CARNIVAL FLYER

            that reads: “SEE THE WONDERS OF THE MYSTERIOUS FATIMA GIRL”.

            Vaas picks it up.  He smiles and walks away with new purpose.

            EXT. CARNIVAL

            It’s crowded and nobody minds the shoddy presentation.

            Vaas cruises the booths and tents.  Anyone who notices him
            either looks away or shoots dirty looks at him.  He defiantly
            smiles in the wake of their ostracizing.  Goes in the

            FREAK SHOW TENT

            crowded with locals gawking at the attractions.  Vaas
            inventories the freaks.  Looks at his crumpled flyer.

            A carnie, JOSEF, 30’s, a simpleton in overalls whose clown
            face looks like an accident, studies Vaas.  A macaque pops
            its head out of Josef’s shirt.  Josef follows Vaas  

            OUTSIDE

            and out of the carnival compound.  Josef lopes after him.

                                JOSEF
                      You didn’t stay long, mein Herr. 

                                VAAS
                      What do you want?

                                JOSEF
                      I have something better than what you saw
                      back there.  A real wonder, mein Herr.  I
                      have her just around the corner.  Only
                      the right kind of people can see her. 

                                VAAS
                      I get it.  In business for yourself.  No.

                                JOSEF
                      She’ll show things your mind won’t be
                      able to handle.  Mein Herr.

                                VAAS
                      Go away before I tell them about your
                      little enterprise.  I...Mind?  What can
                      you possibly know about-- 

                                JOSEF
                      I know she can make you scream.

            EXT. PASTURE

            Josef leads Vaas along.  Josef puts down the macaque.  It
            runs into a bush.  The bush rustles and then PANTING.  Josef
            goes behind the bush.  Comes out dragging a small coffin.

                                JOSEF
                      Wait for it, mein Herr.

                                VAAS
                      For what?  What’d you put in there?

            Josef’s smile widens.  Dares Vaas with a glance.

            Vaas’ expression of doubt turns to curiosity, then amusement,
            then awe.  He reaches a hand out to touch.  Vaas SCREAMS.

            INT. 503 MARBUFFPLATZ - DAY

            Still in his overcoat Vaas awakes.  Goes to a dirty mirror on
            the wall.  Nervously LAUGHS and starts scratching his eyes.

                                VAAS
                      Not yet. Got to tell somebody.  Somebody.
                      Someone else has to know about this
                      before I...Somebody has to know.

            Vaas takes out his writing materials, starts scribbling.  All
            the piles of papers are gone from the room. 

            EXT. MAIN STREET - BUCHENWALD - DAY

            A sea of humanity buys, barters, or just begs.

            Ignoring everyone is VICTOR BARCHAS, 40’s, cane in hand,
            metal brace on a shoe, a man who seems to relish being hated.
            Suddenly a newspaper under his arm gets knocked free.

            Ashamed, Victor watches boys and desperate men smother the
            paper.  They rip it apart ignoring an envelope kicked loose. 

                                VICTOR
                      Out!  Get away or you’re in my book, hmm?

            Victor produces a leather notebook and pen.  That’s all it
            takes.  Instinctively they retreat from the scattered pages.
            Victor rescues his envelope.  Leaves them the shredded paper.

            EXT. ABANDONED FACTORY COURTYARD

            A line of local workers with newspaper cut-outs push to see. 

            Armed POLICEMEN stand guard for a FOREMAN, 50’s, who sets up
            a table and chair, opens a ledger, beckons the first worker.

            From an alley Victor calculates how to get around them.

            Suddenly WERNER, 30’s, approaches the line.  He’s
            Buchenwald’s weasel; a conniver and a notorious liar.

            At sight of him Workers MOAN and direct him to the back of
            the line.  Among the men is CLAUS, 30’s, a John Henry type.

                                CLAUS
                      Werner.  Too late to get the ad from the
                      newspaper.  He’ll want one of ours. 
                      No favors, Werner.  Not for this.

                                WERNER
                      When you hear what I have to tell you
                      you’ll regret saying that, Claus.

            The Foreman pulls his table closer to the policemen. 

                                WERNER
                      I’ll explain it to a dumb head like you.
                      If you don’t get to the bank building
                      before closing time today you can’t get
                      your money stamped with the zeroes.

            The news jumps from man to man.

                                FOREMAN
                      Any man steps out of line forfeits his
                      interview.  Is that clear?  Any and all.

                                OLD WORKER
                      Don’t give him your money, fool.

                                WERNER
                      Just for that you’ll pay double tax. (To
                      Claus) Marks turned into thousand marks
                      like magic.  Who wants his money stamped?

            GROANS sound from the line.

                                WERNER
                      Werner doesn’t need to do any favors.
                      You up front, hurry.  You others, well...

                                YOUNG WORKER
                      I heard he’s only giving chances to work
                      today.  We should go with Werner.  

                                OLD WORKER
                      Trusting him is out of the question.  We
                      either get our money stamped or stay in
                      line.  Unless, there!  Claus, call him.

                                CLAUS
                      The bastard?

                                OLD WORKER
                      Is better than this Untermensch.

            Werner collects money from some men in the line.

                                CLAUS (O.S.)
                      Herr Barchas.  Please, Herr Barchas.

                                CHORUS OF WORKERS
                      Him?!  Not the bastard in building four.

                                FOREMAN
                      You there.  Be quiet.

            Werner’s greedy smile melts when he espies Victor.

                                WERNER
                      Damn him. 

                                CLAUS
                      For our money, Herr Barchas.  Please.
                      You’re not in the line.  We have to be.

            Victor looks at the neutral Foreman, then at the line of men.

                                VICTOR
                      I can’t.  The outgoing train.  My letter.

                                CLAUS
                      But you never get on the train.

            YEAS and approvals bleat from the line.

                                CLAUS
                      We’ll pay you.  How much?  Mockie.

                                VICTOR
                      I don’t want money.  I just want to mail
                      my letter.  You have your business.  I
                      have mine.  Leave me to my work.

            Victor turns toward the train station.  The train WHISTLES. 

                                WERNER
                      That’s right, go. 

            Victor shoots daggers at the gloating Werner, who smirks back
            at him.  Even the Foreman enjoys the spot Victor’s in until
            the line starts morphing into a mob.

                                WERNER
                      Men, wait!  Don’t forfeit your chance.

                                CLAUS
                      If you won’t help us then you won’t get
                      to the train. C’mon men.  Damn you, Herr--     

            Some men step toward Victor.

                                VICTOR
                      NO!  Buchenwald already damned me.

            Victor’s sudden intensity stops the men in their tracks.

                                VICTOR
                      Know what Topf company makes?  Industrial
                      brick ovens.  Only the masons and smiths
                      are getting called back.  You others are
                      wasting your time, and he is letting you.

            Men look at each other.  Train death stares on the Foreman.

                                VICTOR
                      And you let him.                  
                      (Slams his book in Werner’s direction)
                      You hate him when it’s convenient.  You
                      don’t say no to him, any of you.  I’ve
                      said it and I’m saying it.  Damn me?
                      Every time I watch you make the same
                      mistakes out of your own ignorance.    

            Staring at the men Victor picks up his book.  Heads for

            THE TRAIN STATION

            where the Conductor accepts his envelope and hands Victor an
            envelope in return.

            Confused, Victor opens his leather notebook.

                                VICTOR
                      Ist wrong.  I don’t get a letter today.

            Victor studies the envelope as he heads back through the

            ABANDONED FACTORY

            where the remaining men in line begrudgingly pay Werner.

                                WERNER
                      Danke schon, Herr Barchas.  Thank you.

            Victor keeps walking but Claus gets in his way.

                                CLAUS
                      Like good Germans we listened to you just
                      like we listened to the treaty.  You.
                      You’d watch a man bleed to death.  Your
                      problem is you don’t care about anyone.
                      Just those stupid letters.

                                VICTOR
                      Precisely.  And they afford you the
                      luxury of ignorance. 

                                CLAUS
                      No more.  We’re watching you, and that
                      building you haunt.  We’ll find out about
                      you, your letters.  And then we’ll know.

                                VICTOR
                      Stay out of my building. 

            Victor walks away.  Rips open the envelope.  Stops.

            INSERT - THE LETTER

                                
                      Something amazing happening.  Identified
                      positively the threat.  Must take special
                      action against Mirrors.  It’s coming.
                      She cannot find you. 

            INT. TENEMENT - NIGHT

            Vaas lay on a bare mattress.  He’s drenched in sweat.
            There’s a wine bottle tethered to his wrist.  He jerks in his
            sleep and the wine bottle SMASHES against the wall.

                                VAAS
                      NO!  Who’s there?!

            He throws himself at the door.  Jams a chair under the knob.

                                VAAS
                      Show you.  I’ll have to show you.

            Vaas punches the floor by the mattress.  Shards of glass are
            stuck in his knuckles.  With his fist he starts writing huge
            letters in blood on the wall.

            EXT. BUCHENWALD - TRAIN STATION - DAY

            Victor waits behind a crowd of frustrated people questioning
            and griping at the mealy-mouthed CLERK in the ticket office.

                                CLERK
                      All second class and otherwise non
                      priority mail was halted.

                                WERNER
                      We’ve been cut off from jobs, money, even
                      Europe doesn’t want us.  And now no mail?

            The crowd reluctantly breaks up except Werner who studies
            Victor going to the ticket office. 

                                WERNER
                      What was that?  Barchas got a letter! 

            Heads turn to see what Werner is shouting about this time.

                                CLAUS
                      How come he got mail?

                                WERNER
                      You don’t wait in the job line.  You
                      didn’t get your money stamped.  And
                      you’re the only one in Buchenwald to get
                      his mail?  What makes you so special?

                                VICTOR
                      If you listened you wouldn’t be wasting
                      time. (To Clerk) What mail was held up?

                                CLERK
                      All second class and...

                                VICTOR
                      ...otherwise non priority mail.  My
                      letters come priority class.  Guten Tag.

            Victor parts the crowd with his cane.  Leaves.

                                WERNER
                      What keeps you among us non priority
                      class, you bastard? 

            E/I. BUCHENWALD - BUILDING FOUR - DAY

            A condemned, five story apartment building sadly displays a
            tarnished bronze plaque reading: BUILDING IV.

            Victor enters turning the envelope over in his hands.  Sees
            one of many strategically placed intruder alerts, a fallen
            bannister spindle, out of place.  Goes to a door.  

                                VICTOR
                      Who ist there?  Come out.  Put you in my
                      book.  Hello?  I got the letter.  I--

            His door opens.  LILY, early 40’s, weathered, she carries
            herself with the poise of a former beauty, comes out.

            INT. VICTOR’S ROOM - MOMENTS LATER

            Everything in the place: his cot, his hot plate, has a
            singleness about it.  There is a table and one chair.                                                                                                                                             

                                VICTOR
                      I told you I’d write you.

            Victor hides the envelope under a book, lights the hot plate. 

                                LILY
                      You never left a return address the few
                      times you did.  What is this awful place?

            Lily examines a large map of Germany.  It has a twine-linked
            network of headlines, notes, photos, and thumb tacks.

                                VICTOR
                      Difficult but not the worst it could be.

            Victor dips one sad tea bag into two cups. 

                                LILY
                      What could be worse than being in this?

                                VICTOR
                      Not being in it. 

                                LILY
                      Victor, it’s Maria’s birthday soon.  Come
                      home for your niece’s birthday. 

                                VICTOR
                      Oh Lily.

                                LILY
                      You talk about choice, who has it.  I’m
                      taking back your choice to stay away.
                      Just who do you communicate with?

            Victor stares at the envelope underneath the book.

                                LILY
                      You don’t know.  Think you’ll make some
                      grand discovery if you stay.  You don’t
                      feel for me or Maria, you don’t feel--

                                VICTOR
                      I don’t feel responsible.

                                LILY
                      You don’t feel anything.  Whoever these
                      people are stay with them.  They’re all
                      the family you have now.  God help you.

            Victor watches her leave.  Nervously starts cleaning.  Moves
            the book.  Stares at the envelope between two tea cups.
            Clears his throat, smiles.  Rotates one of the cups. 

                                VICTOR
                        I am fine.  How are you?  Das ist good.

            EXT. COTTAGE - DAY - FLASHBACK

            An old, wood table is set with two chipped tea cups.

            INGRID, 10, a waif with the unsettling quiet of a child who’s
            survived a tragedy, waits on a porch smirking at a MAILMAN
            approaching.  Suddenly she looks past him at

            MARIA, 9, a tomboy who tries to act older than her years,
            running toward them.

            Something’s wrong.  Ingrid scrambles for cover.  Hyper
            ventilates.  Resists a violent, involuntary bodily function.

            The Mailman reaches the table. 

            Ingrid’s breathing quiets.  Arms by her sides.  Her gaze
            drifts into the sky.  An ecstatic grin rips across her face.  

            The Mailman holds out an envelope mistaking Ingrid for...

                                MAILMAN
                      Maria?  Guten Tag.  For your uncle.  Your
                      uncle.  I don’t have time for your games.

            Mailman puts the envelope in Ingrid’s stiffened arm.  Leaves.

            Maria watches the Mailman approach her.  And then gawks at

            INGRID STILL SMILING INTO THE SKY

            turn and mechanically walk backwards off the porch.

                                MAILMAN
                      Maria?  How did you get... 

            The mailman watches Maria running for the empty porch.

            INT. DEN - COTTAGE

            An antique piano ages under piles of papers and notes.

            Fondling a wax sealed letter, Maria catches sunlight glinting
            off a metal brace on an orthopedic shoe. 

                                VICTOR (O.S.)
                      Who’s it from, hmm?

                                MARIA
                      It doesn’t have a return address.  Uncle,
                      won’t you come to my tea party?

            Victor finally puts down his newspaper.  Takes the letter.

                                VICTOR
                      I’m too old for that.  So are you soon,
                      hmm?  Go find your mother now.

            Burns the letter.  Stretches for a cane.  Can’t reach.  He
            makes sure she’s gone.  Walks peg-legged to get it.

            INSERT - THE BURNING LETTER
                      “Major Victor Barchas,
                                             By order of the
                      Weimar Republican Guard and The Munich
                      University your presence is hereby and
                      formally--”

             


Posted: 05:44, 2006-Jun-19
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Story that involves the history and government is pretty-hard for me. How could the dialogues and the characters become interesting with such subject.

Posted by renailamechi at 09:10, 2006-Aug-7

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TWO WORDS...SOPHIE'S CHOICE!

Or...Dr. Zhavago?

My Russian isn't what it used to be in Volgagrad... when my Great Grandmother walked across Bavaria with the Bolshevks following close behind burning down the cities. And had nothing to eat but black rye bread.

Shindler's List?
The Piantist?
Boring right?
Sheesh!


Posted by Anni at 11:18, 2006-Aug-18

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