Scriptologist Blogs

ERNIE'S SCREENPLAYS

Destiny's Divas - Episode Three (FINAL of TRILOGY)

10:21, 2006-Sep-15 .. 0 comments .. Link

                                                             DESTINY'S DIVAS

                                                                   Episode Three

 

LOGLINE

 

 

Another kidnapped child, ruthless abductors, an eight year old kidnapping and murder case and one satisfied spirit.

 

EPISODE THREE OF A TRILOGY

 

 

SYNOPSIS

 

In Atlanta there's another kidnapped child before Destiny's Desire even hits town. This time, however, it's a girl, and our team of super-sleuths go into overdrive. The use of an Atlanta detective to assist them on the case adds a new twist, as the girls have to erase his memory of them once the case is solved, as well as anyone else who's involved, including the abductors.

 

Finally returning home, to the New England area, it's time for the girls of D & D to turn their attention towards Destiny's true desire and that is finding those responsible for her brother's kidnapping, molestation, and murder when she was only nine years old. Unorthodox detective work sets the stage for D & D to get a confession by the man who nabbed Josh Masters eight years previous, and in that confession he fingers the man who actually killed the young boy.

 

Now that Destiny's spirit has been satisfied, it's time to remove the powers that her elite team was given, allowing them to be the teen-aged girls they really are. She plans the removal of their powers for New Year's Eve.

 

                                                                          EXCERPT

 

The girls of D & D step out of the elevator and Christine
runs over to them while Lori walks slowly. Christine runs
straight to Wendy and gives her a big hug as she reaches
her.
                                                            
Tears form in the corners of Christine’s eyes.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINE
I don’t believe I’m actually
getting to see D & D this close.
                                                            
Danielle looks that Christine’s friend. Lori’s long red
hair almost matches her own and she goes over to the girl.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
      (to Lori)
Hi! I’m Danielle, the lead
guitarist for D & D.
                                                            
                       LORI
      (discernibly
       withdrawn)
Hi, Danielle. I’m Lori Kilmer.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Girls! Come over and introduce
yourselves to Lori. I’ll be right
back.
                                                            
While the other three girls introduce themselves, Danielle
heads to the front desk.
                                                            
                       MELENA
      (looking up)
Hi, Danielle.
                                                            
Danielle’s hands grip the counter.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Is Lori the sister of that missing
girl?
                                                            
                       MELENA
      (Looking perplexed)
Yes she is. Is that a problem?
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
No, not at all, but I’m glad we
know.
                                                            

12.

                       MELENA
She’s Christine’s friend and we
both thought Lori could use a
break from what’s happening at
home.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
You’re right, she sure can, and
thank you.
                                                            
Danielle returns to the group.
                                                            
                       DANA
Where are we going to eat tonight?
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Seeing as we’re strangers in this
city, and we have two lovely young
guests to show us around, why
don’t we let them choose?
                                                            
Christine stands beside her friend.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINE
I asked Lori to come tonight
because she’s such a nice friend.
Her little sister has been missing
for a while and I’d like her to
choose where she’d like to eat.
                                                            
Wendy Puts her hands on Christine’s shoulder.
                                                            
                       WENDY
That was very polite and
considerate of you, Christine.
                                                            
Danielle places her hand on Lori’s shoulder.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Is there any place special you’d
like to go with us for dinner,
Lori?
                                                            
A slight SMILE appears on Lori’s face.
                                                            

13.

                       LORI
Well there’s Kelliher’s, on the
North Side. They have some great
seafood and you don’t have to be
all dressed up to go and eat
there.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Then we’ll get the hotel van and
have the driver take us there.
I’ll be right back.
                                                            
Danielle returns to the front desk. When she returns to the
group they all head to the foyer and wait for the hotel van
to come around front for them.
                                                            
CUT TO:
                                                            
 
INT. MARRIOTT HOTEL – SUITE 1624 - DAY
                                                            
The girls all grab a seat as they enter the sitting room.
                                                            
                       DANA
Now what are we going to do?
                                                            
Danielle gets up and steps to the center of the room.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Okay, Destiny, show yourself,
please!
                                                            
Destiny’s molecular spirit materializes from the darkened
television screen and forms itself into the girl’s image
they are familiar with.
                                                            
                       DESTINY
You showed those girls a good time
tonight, and it’s obvious Lori was
coming out of her shell. Do you
have Janine’s picture?
                                                            
Danielle reaches into her purse and pulls out the snapshot.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Can you use it?
                                                            
Destiny floats off the floor and her spirit turns to face
Danielle.
                                                            

14.

                       DESTINY
Put Janine’s picture near where my
heart should be Danielle.
                                                            
Danielle looks quickly at the young girl’s picture and then
goes over to Destiny. With the picture facing Destiny’s
form, she places it against that part of her misty body
where her heart should be. She holds it there.
                                                            
                       DESTINY
Remove your hand.
                                                            
Danielle removes her right hand and watches as the picture
stays where she left it, suspended in air and surrounded by
sparkling molecules. The picture becomes aglow a bright
yellow.
                                                            
                       DESTINY
She’s alive. Janine Kilmer is
alive.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
What else can you tell us?
                                                            
                       DESTINY
I see a FARMHOUSE and a WATER SILO
in the vicinity.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Oh my God, Destiny, and were here
in the south. Is there anything
else?
                                                            
                       DESTINY
Janine is locked in a cellar. It
appears they haven’t hurt her, but
there are two men and they both
have weapons. One of the men has
a tattoo of a SNAKE that extends
up the length of his arm. That’s
all I can see. Take the picture,
Danielle.
                                                            
Danielle approaches Destiny and grabs a hold of Janine’s
picture, Destiny’s form dissipates back into the television.



Destiny's Divas - Episode Two

10:11, 2006-Sep-15 .. 0 comments .. Link

                                                           DESTINY'S DIVAS

                                                                 Episode Two

 

LOGLINE

 

A rock band rises to fame and their members receive supernatural powers. They seek out a kidnapped child, capture his abductors, hand them over to the police and remain anonymous.

EPISODE TWO of THREE - A TRILOGY

 

 

SYNOPSIS

 

At the Battle of the Bands, Destiny's Desire makes it to the top of the leader board, allowing them to make it to round two, the final round. Nine other bands make it to round two, including JB & the Tucks. After JB's perfomance, during the second round of competition, he was informed that his son was kidnapped earlier that day. That announcement forced JB to withdraw from further competition as they were tied with Destiny's Desire for top honors. Destiny's Desire refuses to accept a win by default,

 

Destiny's Desire receives the rest of their powers. After returning home to perfect these new additions to their arsenaal of unconventional weapons, they head to Albany to try and locate JB's son, capture his abductors, and at the same time staying out of the limelight. The secret to their success is being able to remain incognito. With Destiny's help, the four girls locate the hideout of Jeremy's abductors. Using the powers Destiny gave them, as well as their youthful agility, D & D captures the abductors, release Jeremy, return him to the police, and remain anonymous.

 

                                                           EXCERPT

 

 

                       WENDY
         Have you looked at the songs yet,
         Danielle? I see the folders there
         on the table.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
I was going to do that when I came
into the kitchen, not expecting to
see my mom home. I ended up
talking to her, ever since I got
down here. Now we all can look at
them.
                                                            
Danielle reaches for the pack of folders.
                                                            

6.

                       LISA
What are the titles of the songs?
                                                            
Danielle grabs the first two folders and looks at the name
on the outer tabs.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Let’s see! This one is called
Reaching For Stardom. The second
one is, Reality has eyes.
                                                            
Danielle looks at the title of the third song and abruptly
stops. Her eyes open wide and a moment later she checks the
last one.

Wendy sees the unusual expression on her friend’s face.
                                                            
                       WENDY
What’s wrong, Danielle?
                                                            
Danielle’s voice sounds deathly serious.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Oh my God, Wendy. I just saw the
titles of these last two songs.
                                                            
                       LISA
Don’t keep us in suspense, girl.
What are they?
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
The third one is called Angel of
Desire and the last one, get this,
The Four Walls of Destiny.
                                                            
                       LISA
      (simultaneously
       with WENDY)
Oh wow!
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
This is freaky!
                                                            
                       LISA
No kidding!
                                                            

7.

                       WENDY
Well we know two of the songs we
won’t be singing, but I wonder if
Destiny has anything to do with
this.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Get real, girl! This is all her.
                                                            
                       WENDY
Then why are there four songs when
we need only one?
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
For one thing, Bill asked her for
four songs, but maybe she just
wants to let us choose for
ourselves. She did say once she
wants us to be challenged.
                                                            
Judy returns to the kitchen.
                                                            
                       JUDY
How are you young ladies doing
this morning?
                                                            
Danielle turns to face her mother.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
This whole thing gets freakier by
the day, mom.
                                                            
Judy stands in the doorway.
                                                            
                       JUDY
In what way, dear?
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
You know that the name of our band
is Destiny’s Desire, right?
                                                            
                       JUDY
Yes, and...?
                                                            
Danielle hands her mother two folders.
                                                            

8.

                       DANIELLE
Take a look at the titles of these
two songs.
                                                            
Judy takes the two folders and looks at the titles.
                                                            
                       JUDY
Whoever this Destiny is, she puts
on quite a show for herself. This
is almost scary.
                                                            
                       DANIELLE
Our sentiments exactly!
                                                            
Front DOORBELL RINGS and is heard in the kitchen.
                                                            
Wendy stands up.
                                                            
                       WENDY
That must be Dana. I’ll get it.
                                                            
WENDY HEADS TO THE FRONT DOOR
                                                            
Wendy opens the door.
                                                            
                       WENDY
Good morning, girl! We’re all in
the kitchen and do we have a
shocker for you.
                                                            
Dana enters the house.
                                                            
                       DANA
After what we saw yesterday, I
doubt anything could shock me any
more, but I’m game.
                                                            
Dana follows Wendy down the hall and into the Kitchen.
                                                            



Destiny's Divas - Episode One

10:00, 2006-Sep-15 .. 0 comments .. Link

                                                       

                                                             DESTINY'S DIVAS

                                                                   Episode One

 

LOGLINE

 

A restless spirit of a teenaged girl, revenge for her brother's kidnapping, molestation, and murder, and an unlikely team of female super-sleuths, under the guise of an all-female rock band, combine their efforts to find kidnapped children and subdue their abductors.

 

SYNOPSIS

 

In Episode One - Destiny Masters dies. Her restless spirit won't rest until those responsible for her brother's kidnapping, molestation, and death, are captured and behind bars.

 

Upon her death by a lightning bolt, Destiny received supernatural powers, but powers she could not use herself, when it came to finding her brother's killers. She finds, however, that she can transfer these powers to others, so she picks her elite team of super-sleuths carefully, giving them just enough of a woman's curiosity to ascertain their desire to be a part of this elite band and group.

 

Danielle Dee - a seventeen year old red-head, never held a guitar before Destiny entered her life. Now she's being asked to be the lead guitarist and leader of

Destiny's elite band, Destiny's Desire.

 

Dana Kay - another seventeen year old, never sang before, outside of her bathroom, and through Destiny she now has the voice of an angel.

 

Lisa Mack - a third seventeen year old, has played the bass guitar as a sophmore in high school, but never to the level of a rock star. With Destiny's help she's a master on the bass and doesn't miss a beat.

 

Wendy Parks, the only eighteen year old, has been to many rock concerts with her brother, at the Boston Garden, but she'd never sat behind a set of drums before Destiny came to her in a dream. With Destiny's assist she has the fastest hands on the toms.

 

With her band Destiny's Desire all together, it's time for Destiny to inform her elite group what their instruments can do, other than for the purpose for which they were designed. It's also a time for them to know what Destiny's Desire stands for, and what their role will be.

 

                                                                      EXCERPT

 

 

FADE IN:

EXT. BALLPARK - MAY 14TH 1983 - DAY
                                                            
A MAN IN HIS THIRTIES - sitting on the bottom row of
bleachers with a child’s baseball glove beside him.
                                                            
A WHITE FORD VAN sits beside the park, against the curb,
running, with the side door open and the driver behind the
wheel.
                                                            
a seven-year-old returns to the park to find his glove and
heads to the bleachers. Seeing a man in the bottom row, he
stops.
                                                            
                       JOSH
Hey mister! Did ya see a ball
glove laying around? When I left
with my friends I forgot to take
it with me.
                                                            
The man looks at the boy, grabs the glove beside him and
shows it to him.
                                                            
                       A MAN
      (smiling)
You mean this one?
                                                            
                       JOSH
Yeah, that’s it! Thanks!
                                                            
The man stands and places his hand on the boy’s shoulders.
                                                            
                       A MAN
Hey, no problem, kid. I’m leaving
anyway so I’ll walk to the van
with you.
                                                            
They approach the van and the man looks around. He reaches
down and scoops the boy up in his arms and shoves him inside
the van, slamming the door shut behind him.

The van pulls away from the curb with wheels screeching and
Josh screaming in the back, while the man holds him down.
                                                            
 
EXT. NEWSSTAND - MAY 17TH 1983 - DAY
                                                            
Paperboy stands with newspaper in his hand.
                                                            

2.

                       PAPERBOY
Extra, extra, read all about it.
The missing Masters boy found
slain. Extra, extra!
                                                            
Hartford Courant - Daily Newspaper

THE BODY OF JOSH MASTERS FOUND SLAIN

At seven-forty, on Tuesday evening, may 16th, 1983, the
bruised and battered body of seven-year-old Josh Masters was
found on the side of the road near New Haven on interstate
84, by the driver of a disabled vehicle. His CB radio call
brought the State Police to the scene within minutes. The
boy has been missing since Sunday, April 30th, when he
returned to the Elm Street Park to retrieve a baseball glove
he’d left behind, and he hasn’t been heard from since. It’s
not known, at this time, if the boy has been sexually
molested, or not, and a full autopsy is scheduled to be
performed, later today, by the Hartford Police Department.
The exact cause of death is not known. Several suspects
have been brought in for questioning and were released. The
boy’s parents and sister have been ruled out as suspects in
Josh’s disappearance.
                                                            
8 YEARS LATER



A Little about me

05:18, 2006-Sep-2 .. 0 comments .. Link

I am 60 years old and live on Boston's North Shore in Massachusetts.

 

I've been writing since the early 1980's having no experience whatsoever with writing.

 

I started writing as a favor for a fellow worker in a machine shop.  He had 750 written pages of text that he wanted to have put onto paper.  This was back before PC's became a household name, so it meant reamsof paper and many typewriter ribbons and correction tape.

 

Well after two years and nine rewrites that I remember, not to mention the 12 reams of typing paper etc. that was used, I couldn't find my friend anywhere.  I'd left the job where we both worked, but either way he dropped off the face of the earth and couldn't be found.  After eight years, I trashed the manuscript I'd worked on for two years, and it was then at 1500 ds typewriten pages, so I dare not guess the word count.  I refused to steal someone else's work, even though the majority ofitwas done by me.

 

It was during this interim that I became interested in writing for myself.  I started off with something I knew and worked up from there.  Overturned was writen in 1993, and rewriten at least 10 times before being published in 2004   In 2001 I published Destiny of the Divas and in 2003 I published its sequel, Destiny of the Divas II - Angel of Mercy.  Late in 2004 I wrote and published my only sci-fi story KASHMANTOU.  In 2005 I published Mountain of Love. 

 

In November of 2005 I was involved with NaNoWriMo (National November Writing Month, where writers from all over the world tried to write, from scratch, a 50,000 word novel or more in 30 days or less.  I accomplished the 50,000 goal on day 10 with a total of 52,012 words and by day 22 I had 65,000 words to finish the story.  Well I started editing it before the end of November, and by late December "Let Freedom Ring" was published.

 

Early in 2006 I decided to try my hand at writing screenplays. Once again I was getting my feet wet in territories I knew nothing about, so I did some serious research, online, and found http://www.screenwritersutopia.com  - a forum for screenwriters, and I asked a lot of questions.  Fortunately I got a lot of helpful answers. Somewhere along the line I found http://www.scriptbuddy.com  and registered to try using their format for writing a screenplay.  Well I loved the site so much that I paid for three months and now have eight screenplays completed, and another one being worked on.

 

Someone sent me an e-mail about Scriptologist.com, and here I am. 

 

I am dedicated to the profession of writing. and am involved with a writer's chat  http://writerschatroom.com and  Writer Circle a Yahoo Groups writing group.

 

More about me later.  Ernie

 



OVERTURNED - Excerpt

12:47, 2006-Aug-29 .. 1 comments .. Link

LOGLINE:

 

Drama - A rivalry high school basketball game, but the visiting team doesn't

               show.  The team captain, Nick Perelli, is forced into a leadership

               role he isn't prepared for.                                                   

 

                                                            SYNOPSIS: 

The "GAME" As it's been tagged by the media over the years, is 

scheduled for Friday night, at Wilkinson, between the Archer Bowmen

and the Wilkinson Buccaneers.  For Wilkinson, Division 'A' champs

and Archer, Division 'B' champs, the season is officially over. This one

game is for nothing more than bragging rights by the winner.

 

The Bowmen won the last two outings between the two teams and 

neither team has pulled off three wins in a row, in eighteen years, so

expectations are high.

 

By almost game time the Bowmen have not shown up in Wilkinson.  A

busload of hoopsters, their cheerleaders, the Archer sports

reporter, the coach and the bus driver have all vanished into thin air.

 

For Archer Police Chief, Tom Connors, finding bus 1307, and all its

occupants, is a must, but nothing can be done until daylight.

 

For team captain, Tony Perelli, however, the game he and the rest of them

will have to play, will not be played with any coach to guide them, nor will it

be played on any hardwood basketball court.  The only rules, as such, is to

stay alive until a rescue can be made, patch up the injuries, keep everyone 

busy, stay warm, and find their missing teammate and cheerleader. 

                                                 OVERTURNED

 

          INT. SCHOOL BUS - MOUNTAIN ROAD - NIGHT

 

         The school bus starts the slow climb to the highest point on

         Mountain Road.  A thick layer of clouds suddenly surrounds

         the bus.  Nick slows down to ten miles an hour.

 

         As he reaches the crest, Nick checks the brakes and the pedal

         slams hard to the floorboards.

 

         The bus is well on its way downhill.  Nick pumps the brakes

         but the bus continues to pick up speed fast.

 

         Forty... forty-five... fifty miles an hour.

 

         There's pandemonium inside the school bus.

 

                                          COACH

                                   (YELLING to Nick)

                         What's wrong?

 

                                          NICK

                                  (YELLING Back)

                         I've got no brakes.

 

         Fifty-five... Sixty... seventy miles an hour.

 

         Nick pulls hard on the emergency brake but it snaps.

 

         Severty-five... eighty... miles an hour.

 

         Nick shuts off the engine. Thesolid wall of granite stares

         him in the face at less than a hundred feet in front of the

         bus.

 

         Everyone braces for a crash.

 

                                            COACH

                                 (YELLING To Everyone)

                         Brace yourselves.

 

         Eighty-five... ninety miles an hour.

 

         Nick steers the bus into the left lane and turns slowly

         towards the right.  At the last second he turns the wheel

         sharply to the left.

 

         The bus flips to the right and the exposed tires slam hard

         against the wall of granite.

 

         The tires explode and catapult the bus across the road and

         over the guardrail.

 

         INT. THE SCHOOL BUS - LATER - NIGHT

 

         Tony comes to and lets out a deep GROAN.  He gently

         touches the side of his head.

 

                                            TONY

                         Oh man, what did I hit?

 

         Tony touches the large knot on the side of his head.

 

                                            TONY

                         Oh God that hurts.

 

         Tony removes his hand quickly.

 

                                             TONY

                         Oh my God, what have we been through?

                                         (YELLING)

     &nb