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Posted on 2008-May-24 at 05:01 in My Screenplay

INT. TRINITY OFFICE. WAITING ROOM. LATER. MORNING

Joseph sits at a chair when, Kim enters the front door
KIM
Good morning

passing, without recognizing him. Joseph eyes her pass

JOSEPH
Good morning madam

Kim enters her office, finding Madam sounding rather awkward.

INT. KIM’S OFFICE. LATER. MORNING

KIM at her desk, A colleague, CAROL TWAINS. BLACK. 35. Pops in. They share the office.

CAROL
What are you doing here...I thought is Ben’s birthday today. Aren’t you exited ?

KIM
Yes it is, but he’s still in Pleasanville with his grandma’s. I had a class and, I’ll be back  before they are home. I am excited ofcourse, but not of my mum bugging me of my work every time we talk.

Finds a document. Talk while doing stuff.

KIM (CONT’D)
When did these arrive?
(Re: Ben)
Do you know it’s the first time he’ll have his birthday at my place? He’s my baby and I can’t even buy him clothes, my mother won’t let me. I still have suitcase full new clothes i bought him since day one.

CAROL
(Re: document)
They’ve just brought them. TEENS ACTIVITY CENTRE? 

KIM
I want to raise him, i want to be his mother again. But I don’t know if he will be happy living with me...
(Re:documents) Yes.
...what kind of a mother doesn’t live with his own kid? But he’ll be miserable...living with me. I think he is more happier live with his grandmother.

CAROL
Com-on. Aren’t you too hard on yourself. You are his mother.
(Re: documents)
What do they say?

KIM
Huh?...I don’t know Carol.

Carol gives up, though not sure which part.

CAROL
Oh...and that brother there, he’s here for you.

KIM looks up, uncertain.

KIM
For me?...who is he?

CAROL shrugs. Kim  continue flipping through the documents. Until a beat later...

KIM (CONT’D)
Oh Shit!

INT. WAITING ROOM. SAME

Kim shakes hands, immediately recognizes this guy.

KIM
You were in my class. Good to see you again, awake. What can I do for you?

JOSEPH
I had a long flight. Is there somewhere we can talk.

KIM hesitates, as if thinking if she really have the time.

KIM
Actually, I have a day off but...come on in.

INT. KIM’S OFFICE. MORNING

Kim searches for a spare chair. Carol watches, knowing she will have to sacrifice hers at the end.

KIM
Sorry, our office is not really for receiving visitors. Thanks Carol...So you come from CUBA?

JOSEPH
No...?

KIM
?...that’s far. What brought you...
(Remembering)
Oh, shit. Are you in a hurry, because I really don’t have time. I’ve to pick up a birthday cake.

JOSEPH
Happy Birthday.

KIM
Thank you, although it’s not mine. It’s my son’s BEN...he’s turning four. You can drive with me as we talk or we can make an arrangements for some another time.

JOSEPH
I would like to, thank you.

Kim gathers her things, though not sure what he meant, then

KIM
Lets go then...
(To Carol)
Don’t be late.

CAROL
(Disliking her idea)
...no mother.

Untitled Comment

Posted on 2008-Jul-23 at 01:27 by Anonymous
quickly glanced at a few lines. I will read it soon and give it the attention it deserves. Be sure to spell check!! Very important. If a script readers sees a misspelled word, it ONLY gives them an OUT to toss yours, so they may continue reading the thousands that are piled on desk.

I get back soon...take care!

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Original message from greatchaser:


I've been wanting to get in touch but i guess am too over worked to promise myself anything. The is thing is.. am up to my ears with this one spec which i really don't want to leave hangin..that's why i've been so slow in keeping contacts.
I recently added you in my friends circle...i don't have too many of those, and i try to nourish the few i get, share much of my work with them, read their work etc you know the drill

My screenpaly is almost ready for shoping but not without sharing a piece of it with friends in my writing circle.
What do you think

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