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10:00, 2006-Jul-5
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As the second hurricane to hit the gulf coast looms south of Louisiana and Texas, the protagonist prepares his family for an evacuation he does not think he will make. Eventually as the storm becomes the third strongest in the Gulf's history; he, his wife, their two children, his father, and his stepfather hit the road and head for San Antonio.The legendary problems of that hurricane's evecaution are experienced first hand by the family as they endure hours on the highway moving at an average speed of 1 mile per hour in most places. The group stops for shelter at a small church where the preacher passes his time getting drunk and playing rock and roll music. The family helps and is helped by a hispanic family, whose 9 year old daughter is the only one in the family who speaks English. Other evacuees include a family with a child afflicted by a pretty serious case of ADHD, and a threesome who have kicked their heroine habit, but are now strung out on methadone. After surviving the hurricane, they make it to their destination, a friends house. Within hours, the video from ground zero reveals that their town was hit hard by the storm. Their house is standing, but a lot of damage has been inflicted. Many problems hit the group, some minimal, like flat tires and maxed out credit cards; and then the ultimate tragedy - the death of the protagonist's father of kidney failure. Through all of this, the couple stays as positive as possible, they grow closer together than they've been in years. They decide to relocate to the San Antonio area, not expecting a perfect life, just a better one... The father manages to mend some fences with everyone befores he dies, he had amost refused to goon the trip, but relented, as if he knew his time was short. Unfortunately, the stepfather (his wife, the protagonist's mother had died barely 4 months before) is unable to recover from his loss and the stress, and goes back to his lonely apartment, with no power, content in his misery... That's the pitch. The main character finally understands that he has to grow up, even though he thought he was already grown. He and his wife finally stop hoping and searching for the perfect life and accept that in all of the bad, there is so much good, so many things of which to be thankful. A recurring theme when there is a problem, is "Well, so we had a flat, at least it didn't happen in the middle of the hurricane," or "So the alternator went out, at least it waited until we made it to San Antonio." At one point when the father is in the hospital; cognisant, but unable to speak because of his stroke; the main character sighs and looks at his Dad, not realizing at the time that he has only days to live. "Well, Dad, at least we haven't been shot at." The father struggles but manages to raise his fingers to his lips in the "shhh." position. Through it all, they never lost their sense of humor. After his funeral, the couple stop at a bank to renew a loan. When they are in the bank, it is robbed at gunpoint, the main character almost gets shot (maybe he should get shot in the screenplay). This is all true. Everything here really happened, and then some. I think it would make a good story and would be fairly easy to write.... What do you think? Leave a Comment { Last Page } { Page 5 of 6 } { Next Page } |
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